Dorry’s Claim: 50 Word & Six Sentence Story Thursday

60© Deb Whittam 2020

“It wasn’t fair that Dorry couldn’t get her hopes up.” – Tuesday Mooney Talks to Ghosts – Kate Racculia

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Old Reliance had seen better: better waters, better days; frankly, better owners. The same could be said of Dorry; feet swinging over the murky Mississippi, frayed cut-offs brushing against Reliance‘s rusted hull, matted clumps of curls sticking to her dirty brow.

It wasn’t fair that Dorry couldn’t get her hopes up, seeing as she never learned what hope was. Come to think of it, she’d never learned much of anything except to not drown and not get beaten.

No matter; things would be different, starting that morning.

Dorry rose, stood against the sweaty sky, declared, “I claim Reliance as m’own!,” and washed her hands of the man floating downriver forever.

©2020 Chelsea Owens

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GirlieOnTheEdge‘s rules:

Rules of the hop:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word.
Link the URL to your post via the blue “Click here to enter” button.
Spread the word and put in a good one to your fellow writers 🙂

PROMPT WORD:  CLAIM

36 thoughts on “Dorry’s Claim: 50 Word & Six Sentence Story Thursday

  1. UP February 20, 2020 / 4:43 pm

    “stood against the sweaty sky” lovely line. Good six. Glad you’re here. UP

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    • Chelsea Owens February 20, 2020 / 5:44 pm

      Thanks! That one popped into my head as I wrote. 🙂

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  2. Deb Whittam February 20, 2020 / 6:33 pm

    Ohhh I love revenge 🥳

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      • Deb Whittam February 21, 2020 / 2:06 am

        😉

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  3. johnlmalone February 20, 2020 / 6:43 pm

    a terrific piece: I love its succinctness and its shock at the end; also love the language that almost eases into dialect

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      • johnlmalone February 20, 2020 / 6:59 pm

        ‘dialecting’is tricky but it does add authenticity to a piece as in Huck Finn, Trainspotting or James Kelman’s ‘How Late It Was’; the danger is that it can drift for the reader into unintelliigibility

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  4. GirlieOnTheEdge February 20, 2020 / 7:34 pm

    So much packed into 6 sentences! And what an ending. Was so not expecting that, lol
    Glad you joined in this week 😀

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  5. clark February 20, 2020 / 7:36 pm

    damn!*
    Nicely Six’td
    *compliment on a subtle bit of engaging sentences with a ‘sharp angle close’

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  6. tnkerr February 20, 2020 / 8:42 pm

    I love stories portraying strong female characters. This one is exceptional.
    Clockwork Orange… Cut throat britva.

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  7. Violet Lentz February 21, 2020 / 2:16 am

    Chels, this is amazing! I love the twist. So glad to see you picking up a 50 word thursday prompt. I love them! And of course to do it all in six sentences!! WoW!

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    • Chelsea Owens February 21, 2020 / 8:00 am

      Thanks! I started out answering the 50-Word and realized it was naturally moving toward a Six as well. 🙂

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    • Chelsea Owens February 21, 2020 / 11:01 am

      It *is* rather murky water; difficult to see things in it…

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  8. H.R.R. Gorman February 22, 2020 / 1:08 pm

    Yay for Dorry getting out of a bad situation (and, depending on what she looks like, possibly going to juvie!)!

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  9. D. Avery @shiftnshake February 23, 2020 / 3:09 pm

    Very nice. You did Dorry proud. I think she may be teaching herself to hope, now that a certain encumbrance is wall-eyed in the water.

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  10. mymindlessdrivel February 23, 2020 / 5:16 pm

    Well, that got eery real fast. Great twist ending.

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  11. Lisa A. Listwa February 24, 2020 / 12:33 pm

    Nothing like tossing off a little flotsam and jetsam! Nicely done. The photo takes me back to the days of Mark Twain a bit.

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    • Chelsea Owens February 24, 2020 / 1:14 pm

      😀 Flotsam and Jetsam, eh? It reminded me of that as well, but that’s probably because nearly all my Mississippi reading is Twain’s books.

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